Alliances

Chap1 Pg17

November 28th, 2011, 12:00 am
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RayleneQuinn November 1st, 2011, 10:14 pm
Oooh Hana's in trooouuubbllllle
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Nisey November 28th, 2011, 1:27 am
Just a quick comprehension comment: in the second panel, it may be better to have "Hana." in a speech bubble separate from her statement. This might just be me, but in my reading experience, compound bubbles like that are generally indication of the same person speaking, and it took me several run-throughs to realize what was going on.

Hope you don't mind the critique, and keep it up!
RayleneQuinn November 28th, 2011, 6:52 pm
@Nisey: Thank you for the critique! I guess it would be better pulled off if i had outlines for my bubbles, which i don't know how to do in gimp so...I'll probably take what you've said to heart xD